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[Fire Emblem Fates] Earthborne

Fire Emblem

 Here’s part two of Taffer reviews Self-Inserts, and this one couldn’t be any different from the one before.

84k words, complete @FF.net by Mixed Valence
Genre/What to expect: Adventure, a little science in the face of magic, and a very important wallet.
Rating: T
Pairings: none as of yet

Driving in the rain is dangerous – your car could hydroplane, or, if it’s really not your day, plane into another universe entirely. The second was what happened to me.

Suitable for fandom blind readers? Not specifically, having knowledge of the fandom would help with identifying critical plot points.

Reviewed by: Tafferling


Having your car aquaplane into another dimension is one hell of a thing, and it’s what ends one Harrison in the unknown, with nothing but an electric torch and a wallet to his name. And then he almost gets himself picked to pieces by a pack of Faceless.

Before I read Earthborne, I knew nothing about Fire Emblem, but Harrison is a great guide, and gave me a decent insight in what to expect from the characters and the settings. He’s also rather resourceful, and he has to be, as there’s natural mistrust surrounding him that puts him on the spot frequently and has him struggle to prove that he doesn’t mean any harm.

What stands out most to me? How Harrison makes friends with the cast, but how he isn’t unconditionally liked. There’s still mistrust, and sometimes showing off your otherworldly wallet contents simply isn’t enough to quell that.

Ontop of that we’ve got his analytical mind, and an affection for science, which shows just how different he is to the fantastic setting he’s been thrown into. And since Harrison comes pre-equipped with knowledge of the Fates story line, and ends up right in the middle of it, we see him carefully attempting to steer things. With… well… you should read to find out what sort of results it has.

This is where my fandom blind reading doesn’t help the review much, as I’m not familiar with the consequences of either possible paths, but I trust that Harrison has reasons for what he’s doing. Which, at the end of the day, echoes his good heart as he’s torn between two groups of people that have both shown him kindness.

Mixed Valence is very invested in this piece, and you can tell. He updated regularly, stays engaged with his readers, and you can visible see how his writing is shaped with each passing chapter. There’s humour, quite often at poor Harrison’s expense, and there’s emotion, and a good amount of combat and action that’s well written and easily followed.

Give it a go!

Review examples from FF.net:

I love how you aim to expand on the story, and add so many things new to it. Most retellings, let alone self inserts, just follow the main story with the same number of chapters as chapters in the game, more or less. However, you’re on chapter 26 and only at the in-game chapter 6. The amount of detail and love you’ve given this is spectacular.

I also like how your character is not generic, or over the top, or bland. There’s enough emotion and personality, with several hindrances that make him interesting. I understand your fear of making Harrison a Mary Sue/Gary Stu. I’m glad you’re keeping that in check. I also find it pretty funny how your character curses so much around people who tend not to.

 

Your story is really a fine piece i bloody love every bit of it.
Harrison is not a OP Gary sue of darkness and light but more of your average guy with luck.
The world building is strong! I can imagine the world you are in a lot better with every chapter.

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[Mass Effect] Loss Effect

Omega

Self Inserts come with a stigma attached to them, which I’ve personally never quite understood. Much like any other form of fiction, there isn’t anything inherently wrong, or even right about them. The execution is what matters.

Me? I adore them. So I’ll be sharing some of the ones I’ve found that I think are certainly worth a read. This is number one in this review series.


70k words, complete  @FF.net  by Iyriiea 
Genre/What to expectAdventure. The scary soft of “what am I doing here?” adventure, and a clever character that gets to decide whether or not she’s okay with drowning on the lawless Omega station.
Rating: T
Pairings: none as of yet

One minute I was home. Safe, secure, happy. The next, I was in another dimension where my life is perpetually at risk and everything could be riding on what I know. I am very, very lost.

Suitable for fandom blind readers? Somewhat, since the main character has to learn along with the reader. Background knowledge of Mass Effect and their alien races would certainly help though.

Reviewed by: Tafferling


There are a lot of things to be said about Shawna, the unlucky soul that finds herself plucked from her comfortable room back in our somewhat bland reality, and wakes on Omega to find her life turned all manners of around. Of all the places in Mass Effect’s Milky Way, the lawless Omega station may not be the worst, but it gets pretty damn close.

And Shawna doesn’t get the luxury to dwell on that for long. She’s lost. She’s alone. She’s hungry and thirsty- but she’s also clever. Really clever.

Choosing life, rather than starving in an alley, Shawna finds a new best friend in a recently re-purposed Omni tool, and sets her mind to one thing: survival. Sometimes that doesn’t come easy, and Omega doesn’t spare her the harsh reality of the costs involved, and that’s when Iyriiea reminds us of just how human the girl is.

Loss Effect comes with a cast made up entirely of Original Characters up to this point, and takes place three years prior to the events of Mass Effect. But does that take anything away from it? Hell, no. Iyriiea spends time building Shawna’s life on Omega instead, and gives us a wonderful look into how an alien human like her interacts with Batarians, Turians, Salarians, etc… without having any real social cues to go with at first.

In fact, the cast of original characters is what has me hooked on this one, since I can’t wait to see how they continue to interact, and how their relationships will pan out as the months roll by.

Ontop of that, the piece is well written, with an easy flow to the prose, excellent pacing, and a clear direction.

Review examples from FF.net:

I gotta say, its refreshing to see another take on merc groups. Usually all i see is them being Asshole’s, or that they’re just a gang of some sort, it’s nice to see that you didn’t make them out like that.

I also like how you show an average day when it comes to the teammates, how normal they are.

I’d like to start off by saying that you did a good job making this chapter believable. There are many fics on the site that fail to capture the stress of actually being abducted and brought into another universe, and then there are some that don’t even format their story in a coherent matter. You have achieved what many on this site fail to do: create a believable and readable story.